Sam the soldier

In our class, we read this book called "The Anzac puppy" by Peter Millett and Trish Bowles. W.A.L.T: write a flashback from a different perspective and use show not tell. What I enjoyed about this flash back was adding emotive language to try make the reader cry. What I could do next time is to add more onimatapaia.
Sam

I can remember. Way back in the war. Lying in the trenches, with my good old pal Freda who I promised to give back to this lovely lady who couldn’t afford her.

Around 1915, me and this innocent little puppy named Freda, were holding on to dear life, as we can see bullets constantly zooming past us like Sonic. I forgot to mention the bitter weather we had during the day, and the blistering heat we had during the day. Or even some days one of the two lasted the whole day. Anyway, when the bullets kept zooming past, I could see some of my friends getting shot, one after another. I tried to not let my tears get the best of me but I just couldn’t hold the tears. Day after day, explosion after explosion and casualty after casualty, I thought it was the end for me. Until one fateful day, I woke up, ready for more trouble, but what came to my surprise, my sergeant was screaming, “It’s over!!!”. After the war, I returned with a smile in my face. When I returned Freda to the lady, she was happy like she on the lotto. Shen then looks at me, I start to blush, and soon after, we fell in love and got married.